KotO is an odd, very ambitious little crossover fic. Unfortunately that seems have led to the author losing interest in it two times. It might help any would-be writers a little, trying to point out some of the bigger ways it held itself back.
The story has 14 heroes right at the start. Then add in girlfriends for all of them, their monster partners, then evil riders, then more hero riders. And all the kids they go to school with. It's pretty overwhelming.
It talks about stories needing to be willing to update to modern sensibilities, but it doesn't act on that very well. Its own villains are usually 2-Dimensional bullies whose only motivations are being jealous of the heroes' popularity and wanting to steal their girlfriends. Maybe you'd say that's the point, but the heroes never take pity and try to get them to develop as characters, or address that kind of thinking as a problem with EAH's Destiny system. Instead they're always given a merciless "The Reason You Suck" Speech and clearly meant to be seen as villains.
The fic couldn't seem to settle on a tone. It often uses EAH's silly puns in what's supposed to be a tense fight scene. Likewise two of the heroes are supposed to be edgy anti-heroes, but the writer didn't seem to know how to write characters like that while having them be on a team with more straightforward heroes, or to make the reader want to see their relationships work out. This led to the characters only doing low-key "evil" stuff (Max), or the writer trying to course-correct on the fly a lot so one of them (Kyle) didn't go too far.
The Isekai element never did anything but get in the way. It was always obvious the heroes really were the heirs of the Round Table even though it kept saying they weren't, and the story never tried to explain how the different worlds related to each other (The heroes come from a world where Snow White's a character in books and a movie, and now they're in a world where they're friends with Snow White's daughter. How's that work?).
There's some uncomfortably provocative stuff for a story with teenage characters, like a chapter where Briar Beauty sleeps in the same bed as her boyfriend in nothing but lace lingerie. Or occasional talk of 15-year-olds "getting laid".
I think when he tried to reboot this, the writer would've been better off adapting Saber instead of Ryuki. Just 6 heroes would've taken a lot of weight off him, and you could probably do some interesting things with its book power items when your M Cs know the characters in the books for real.
Paladin, if by some miniscule chance you see this, I hope it helps.
Fanfic Tries to take on too much
KotO is an odd, very ambitious little crossover fic. Unfortunately that seems have led to the author losing interest in it two times. It might help any would-be writers a little, trying to point out some of the bigger ways it held itself back.
I think when he tried to reboot this, the writer would've been better off adapting Saber instead of Ryuki. Just 6 heroes would've taken a lot of weight off him, and you could probably do some interesting things with its book power items when your M Cs know the characters in the books for real.
Paladin, if by some miniscule chance you see this, I hope it helps.
Peace.